Yukai Aoi [DONE]

[yukaiaoi]

: Character Information |::

Yukai Aoi

Type:Original
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Sexuality: Bi
Status: Single
Interest: Tao Mi[guy]< can someone play him for me
Face Claim: I m not sure if he from something , but please let me use him ,hes perfect.

Appearance:

Most people in his family is short in size. Yukai on the other hand does not go into that mold. He stands at five foot ten inches tall. While the rest of his family stands five foot five inches and below. His sister is the shortest , she is only five foot two. Like his mother, his younger sister. He has dark raven colored hair with large bangs.He gets his dark grey eye color from his father.

Yukai has a very dark look about him. He wears all black all the time. His shirt is a short sleeved one.The pants on his legs are of course black , and the cut off the at the ankles. Like all his fellow ninja he wears black ninja sandals.Yukai owns and green jacket , like all other chunnin. But ,he really isnt a chunnin just yet So , he keeps it aside untill he becomes one. Although he probably will never wear it.

Personality:

Yukai is usually a dark and gloomy looking fellow. He keeps to himself most of the time. So , usually the only person you see with him is Tao. Because he cannot figure out how to make him go away. So , he has learned to get used to the idea that Tao is around. Yukai is also one of those people who bottle up their feelings. Out of fear of what mighty happen if they were let out.

Perhaps he is afraid of what others may think. He doesn't know himself thus why he says nothing. They only way that he would probably let them out. Is probably amount of high emotional stress. That made he feel well or uncomfortable. Sometimes he comes of to a jerk to people that annoyed him. So , he is curious to why Tao follows him around so much.

History:

Mr. and Mrs. Takamo Aoi had been friends since their ninja school days. They spent every waking moment at eachothers side. When the left school , they were put on the same team. Also they year they started dating. After some pushing from some of their other friends. Who thought they were one hundred percent perfect for eachother. When the two of them were nineteen years old. They finally got married , got pregnant with their first child yukai. Due to that Mrs. Aoi had to wait to take her jounin exam.

When Yukai was eight years old , finally in ninja school. His mother finally went for her jounin exam. Also that year his father became a Anbu black op. His mother was very pissed by this matter. So , she ignored him for a week or so. About two years later Mrs. Aoi got knocked up once again. They ended up having a little girl this time. They decided to call her Ekira Rin after Mrs. Aoi's mother.

A year after the birth of their daughter. Mr. Aoi got a call for a big important mission. He left three days after telling his family about it.The mission was a S rank located in the rice country. He told them he would be gone for about year or two. His wife was mad and then ended on an anger note. Yukai thought his mother was taking things over board. And decided to ignore her until she got over her self.

When Yukai turned twelve years old he graduated from school. He was happy to be out of there , because it had felt like ages. About a couple days after leaving , he was assigned a team. His jounin leader was a busty women in her early twenties. As for his other teammates they were different from each other. The boy was a cute perky blond named Tao Mi. Who followed Yukai around like a love sick puppy. The girl was a shy red head by the name of Sango.

When the kids were all fourteen , their teacher finally entered them in the Chunnin exams. But they were told they would not taking them until they were sixteen. All three of them were pissed off at their teacher. But she just shrugged it off , saying their going to have to wait. Just train until then she told them with a smile , a flip of her hair.

Chakra Element: Fire

Rank:Genin[soon to Chunnin]

Affiliation: Leaf

Weapons:
~ Kunai
~ Shuirken
~ Paper Bombs
~ Smoke Bombs
~ Food Pills
~ Ninja Wire
~ Needles

Known Jutsu:
~ Body substitute skill [Kawarimi no jutsu] :: It's implied in the name. The user switches his or her body with a plant, animal or anything for that matter. This is used to escape dangerous situations such as many sharp projectiles being flung at the person. Sometimes you can damage your opponent with this attack even.


~ Fire Element, Grand Fireball Technique[Katon, Goukakyuu no Jutsu] :: A technique where the user builds up chakra in their chest and blows a large ball of fire from their mouth.


~ Fire Element, Phoenix Fire Technique[Katon, Housenka no Jutsu] :: A technique where the user blows multiple fire balls from his mouth. It can also be combined with throwing weapons, which creates weapons engulfed in flames.


~ Transformation skill[Henge no jutsu] :: A basic shinobi skill. Transforms the user into another different appearance. Whether they transform into another person or turn into a material thing such as a shuriken, doesn't matter.


~ Fire Element, Dragon Fire Technique[Katon Ryuuka no Jutsu] :: A powerfull technique which will surround the user by flames. Out of those flames comes a very powerfull beam of fire.


~ Release[Kai] :: A jutsu that destroys/cancels out an illusionary jutsu attempted on the user. Only Shinobi with strong chakra control (such as Sakura) can perform. The user releases a large amount of chakra then quickly haults it. The Genjutsu is usualy dispelled after that, depending on how strong the skill is.

~ Clone Technique[Bunshin no Jutsu] :: Everyone is required to know this. Requirement to Graduate as a Gennin. This is a basic jutsu. It creates illusions of the caster, in other words: clones. These are basic clones that aren't real. If they are hit by something, they automatically disappear.


~ Shadow Shuriken[Kage Shuriken no Jutsu] :: A technique which places a second shuriken in the shadow of a first (thrown) shuriken, confusing the enemy.


Theme Songs(s): Basektcase-Green Day ,Coming Clean-Green Day
Extra Notes: Any notes that don't apply to any of the sections.

: Puppeteer Information |::

Your Name: kenji
Your Age:18
Read The Manga / Seen The Anime? Yeah I have
How'd you find me?! I play Shika ,Itachi
Rule Code: Flirtatious Fujiwara
Sample RP:

Today was the day , all week or so was the festival. Ino had suggested he should go to. He clamied that it was not his thing. She told him to ask Temari , he thought what hell.

It was about three in the evening in the leaf village. When Shika arrived in the hidden leaf forest. Wondering if he would randomly run into Temari here. When she was on her way to the leaf village. That way he would not have to go looking for her. And have to go all the way to the sand village. To find out that she had already left for his home.

That would be a real drag and a half. So , he wasnt about to waste some time doing. When he could take the easy way out. Were he could said here and wait. And then go home if she never showed up. It was no big deal to him anyone. It wasnt like he had a big speech planned or something.

[Kumataka]

Whoo, if you give me some of the specifics I can write up a profile for Tao [I'm dropping a WIP of mine]. The only thing I see cause to pick at is that he has a chuunin vest already, even though he's still a genin. Other than that, nice profile, and nice pic.

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[yukaiaoi]

thanks. ill send you the tit bits on tao in pm .
and ill fixed the vist part.
so
fixed

[Kumataka]

Alright, the only other thing I see now (sorry I missed it before!) is that he has Kage Bunshin, which (despite the fact that Naruto had it) is definitely not a technique that a genin would know.

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[yukaiaoi]

ok fixed

[Haruno Sakura]

I have luckily had the liberty of slipping onto the computer at the library for a little while, so I'm going to quickly go through this as best as I can in order to fill whatever of the staff is missing / can't be around...

Er, for one, 5'2 isn't actually that short. 5'2-5'4 is average for girls, so if you want him to be considered pretty tall for 16... I'd say around 5'10-6'2 or so. If the shortest is 5'2, then the family itself isn't actually shorter than average. She'd actually be around average height for a female.

I don't have time to look over everything else, so that's all I'll say for now. I have other places that need help too ><

[yukaiaoi]

ok fixed

[Haruno Sakura]

Five foot five and below is still average-ish, especially for women. I'd say making it five feet and under if you want to consider them short. If his sister's the shortest, then she'd probably be like, 4'6 or something depending on her age. Sachiko's 4'6", but she's also twelve...

Okay... I'm not gonna lie, your grammar really bugs me, especially with your commas. You don't put a space before the comma, only after. Look at how my stuff is written in this; there's only one space after the comma. Please go through your app and fix all that. Not letting it slide this time.

Now... your history. I'm really going to rip this apart, so look for my comments in pink.

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Mr. and Mrs. Takamo Aoi had been friends since their ninja school days. They spent every waking moment at eachothers side. When the left school , they were put on the same team. Also they year they started dating. After some pushing from some of their other friends. Who thought they were one hundred percent perfect for eachother. When the two of them were nineteen years old. They finally got married , got pregnant with their first child yukai. Due to that Mrs. Aoi had to wait to take her jounin exam. Okay, for one, fix your grammar on there. I see miscapitalized words, and "each other" is two words, not one. Also, we don't need to know what the predecessor of his life was. It's not about his parents, it's about Yukai. This whole paragraph isn't needed at all.

When Yukai was eight years old , finally in ninja school. His mother finally went for her jounin exam. Okay, that could all be one sentence. Try looking up how to use commas... because they come in useful... and most of the time, the way I read your stuff, you don't always use them properly. Now... what happened to his pre-Academy life? You totally skip from birth to him being eight and in the Academy. Something had to happen. Make something happen. It doesn't have to be elaborate, but like, give him some depth, really! Also that year his father became a Anbu black op. His mother was very pissed by this matter. So , she ignored him for a week or so. Okay, so why was she mad at him? You would think she'd be proud that her husband would have such a good job, or such a high standing as a shinobi, right? What sort of significance did this have to Yukai? Did he understand it at the time? Did it cause discord in the family? At the moment this just seems like writing to make the app look longer. About two years later Mrs. Aoi got knocked up once again. They ended up having a little girl this time. They decided to call her Ekira Rin after Mrs. Aoi's mother. Okay... Please don't use the slang 'knocked up'. Just say she got pregnant once again. Now, what significance did the birth of Yukai's younger sister have on him? Was he angered that she was now getting all the attention as the new thing? Was he happy that the spotlight was no longer on him?

A year after the birth of their daughter. Mr. Aoi got a call for a big important mission. He left three days after telling his family about it.The mission was a S rank located in the rice country. He told them he would be gone for about year or two. His wife was mad and then ended on an anger note. Yukai thought his mother was taking things over board. And decided to ignore her until she got over her self. Again, why was his mother mad, and how did this affect him? This paragraph is pointless if it has nothing to do with Yukai. I'd suggest rewriting your history so it focuses on him, not everyone else. What significance did this mission have? What happened to his father? Did they hear from him again? You again skipped three years of his life, three IMPORTANT years in the Academy.

When Yukai turned twelve years old he graduated from school. Woah, you're skipping again? Elaborate. I want him to have a life. You barely have anything for a history so far, and sad to say it's irritating me slightly... He was happy to be out of there Okay? You need more of a reason than that. Did he hate it? Was it just too damn long for him? Was it too easy? , because it had felt like ages. About a couple days after leaving , he was assigned a team. His jounin leader was a busty women in her early twenties. As for his other teammates they were different from each other. The boy was a cute perky blond named Tao Mi. Who followed Yukai around like a love sick puppy. The girl was a shy red head by the name of Sango. Oh my! Something that's focusing on Yukai now. How does Yukai feel about Sango and Tao? Does he find them annoying? Is he crushing on either one of them?

When the kids were all fourteen And now you're skipping more time. ELABORATE, DAMMIT. I hate it when people skip jumps like that WHICH ARE VITALLY SIGNIFICANT, ESPECIALLY IF THE HISTORY IS SKIMPY TO BEGIN WITH. , their teacher finally entered them in the Chunnin exams. But they were told they would not taking them until they were sixteen. All three of them were pissed off at their teacher. But she just shrugged it off , saying their going to have to wait. Just train until then she told them with a smile , a flip of her hair. And now you totally left out the last two years of his life. Shinobi go on missions, you know, so like... make something happen... Yukai's very uninteresting, and it bores the staff to review uninteresting apps like this. Hence, why it takes longer. Reviewing requires muse, you know.

I'll get to the rest later. You've got lots to work on already.